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The Bandshell

Posted on March 25, 2015 by stomperdad

When nothing else exists
The whisper of trees cease
Cicadas quiet.
Our bodies pressed close
Our eyes lock
Holding our souls embrace
With your silvery sweet satsuma scent
The band plays our song
We dance
Like no one’s watching
And you giggle
Because I have two
Left
Feet.

This is a story in 100 words or fewer for Friday Fictioneers based on the photo above. Click the blue frog to read more stories inspired by this photo!

42 thoughts on “The Bandshell”

ansumani on March 25, 2015 at 10:18 am said:

Soft and sweet

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- stomperdad on March 25, 2015 at 12:45 pm said:
  
  Thank you.
  
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Claire Fuller on March 25, 2015 at 11:26 am said:

I love how romantic this is, and then you bring us back to reality at the end, but it’s still really loving.

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- stomperdad on March 25, 2015 at 12:47 pm said:
  
  Thanks and it sort of is real, though it hasn’t actually happened, yet 🙂
  
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unwindthechaos on March 25, 2015 at 12:12 pm said:

This is so sweet! I love how imperfectly perfect their love is, and even more how you hide the “I love you” along the poem. Seriously, great work here.

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- stomperdad on March 25, 2015 at 12:50 pm said:
  
  I thought of the hidden message at the last minute and had to add few extra words to make it work. Thanks for your kind words.
  
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bykimberlylynne on March 25, 2015 at 1:36 pm said:

I love the sibilant alliteration that softens the earlier section of the poem, then the subtle shift after “satsuma scent” to harder consonants nearing the end. As Batty Koda said, “Awesome use of the language, Dude.” The ILY is a nice touch.

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- stomperdad on March 25, 2015 at 4:55 pm said:
  
  Wow! Thanks for your awesome comment. I dare say you have a better understanding of our language! I just write the words and let everyone else do the interpretations. Only the ILY was on purpose 🙂 Thanks reading and glad you liked it.
  
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  - bykimberlylynne on March 25, 2015 at 5:29 pm said:
    
    Even more so when the effect is organic, not deliberately managed. The muses were with you on this one 🙂
    
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elmowrites on March 25, 2015 at 2:08 pm said:

Aww, sweet stuff. I like the specifics – satsuma scent – and the romantic humour of the last few words.

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- stomperdad on March 25, 2015 at 5:22 pm said:
  
  The specifics are so the person who it was written for would understand it was for her 🙂 And those last few last line are very true. Happy you liked it and thanks for commenting!
  
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micklively on March 26, 2015 at 3:40 am said:

Just lovely, through and through: well done.

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- stomperdad on March 26, 2015 at 6:07 am said:
  
  Thank you!
  
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Margaret on March 26, 2015 at 7:55 am said:

Touching. The feelings are beautifully portrayed. Love the last lines.

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- stomperdad on March 26, 2015 at 8:06 am said:
  
  Thanks Margaret. This one was easy to write once the muses provided me the idea 🙂
  
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gahlearner on March 26, 2015 at 11:03 am said:

That’s so romantic, and yay for someone with two left feet being brave enough to dance.

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- stomperdad on March 26, 2015 at 11:16 am said:
  
  Anything for the love of his life 🙂
  
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k rawson on March 26, 2015 at 11:13 am said:

So very sweet, and I love the I love you woven inside!

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- stomperdad on March 26, 2015 at 11:17 am said:
  
  Thanks! That was a last minute idea.
  
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  - aliciajamtaas on March 27, 2015 at 7:54 pm said:
    
    It is a delightful last minute idea. Well done.
    
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junkersfictioncorner on March 26, 2015 at 12:02 pm said:

Love how you incorporated the acronym.

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- stomperdad on March 26, 2015 at 12:05 pm said:
  
  Thank you.
  
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Nan Falkner on March 26, 2015 at 7:07 pm said:

Dear Stomperdad, Fantastic and romantic. Love it, love it, love it! Nan 🙂

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- stomperdad on March 26, 2015 at 7:57 pm said:
  
  Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! This was an entirely new route for my Friday Fictioneer story. Glad you loved it!
  
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Dale on March 27, 2015 at 10:44 am said:

Such a sweet tale. Loved it.

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- stomperdad on March 27, 2015 at 11:02 am said:
  
  Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading and commenting!
  
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Taygibay on March 27, 2015 at 12:52 pm said:

Simply charming, Tay.

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- stomperdad on March 27, 2015 at 12:56 pm said:
  
  Thank you 🙂
  
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on March 27, 2015 at 4:34 pm said:

This sounce like the same guy as the one in my story… Clumsy guys capture the beautiful girls.

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- stomperdad on March 27, 2015 at 5:02 pm said:
  
  It was completely unintentional. However, I did read yours before writing mine and I guess the theme got lodged in my subconscious. That, and I do dance like I have 2 left feet so it’s also a bit of a true story.
  
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  - Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on March 27, 2015 at 5:06 pm said:
    
    I just liked how well they went together…
    
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  - stomperdad on March 27, 2015 at 5:31 pm said:
    
    🙂 They complimented each other nicely.
    
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aliciajamtaas on March 27, 2015 at 7:55 pm said:

This made me laugh – in a good way. My husband has one and a half left feet but keeps me smiling when we dance. Really enjoyed this.

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- stomperdad on March 27, 2015 at 8:47 pm said:
  
  Thank you! I’m totally left footed with the rhythm of a June bug. But I try! 🙂
  
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dmmacilroy on March 29, 2015 at 5:53 am said:

Dear Stomperdad,

You nailed it with this sweet short sonnet. I loved the larger story and the smaller message. Creative, loving and languid. Good job.

Aloha,

Doug

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- stomperdad on March 29, 2015 at 8:38 am said:
  
  Thank you for reading and for leaving such a kind comment. Means a lot!
  
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rochellewisoff on March 29, 2015 at 5:54 am said:

Dear Stomperdad,

Brevity is the soul of wit. Short and terribly sweet with a hidden message. Very well done.

Shalom,

Rochelle

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- stomperdad on March 29, 2015 at 8:39 am said:
  
  Thank you Rochelle. If it weren’t for you and your weekly photo prompt many of these stories (definitely my own) wouldn’t happen.
  
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Tracey@WhatsforDinnerDoc.com on March 29, 2015 at 1:06 pm said:

This piece has a gentle cadence to it, much like the dance itself.
Tracey

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- stomperdad on March 29, 2015 at 1:35 pm said:
  
  Thanks Tracey… My aim was to make the words flow like the couple’s dance. Then trip up at the end 🙂
  
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Snow's Fissures and Fractures on April 1, 2015 at 6:41 pm said:

Creative and sweet, double the score.

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- stomperdad on April 1, 2015 at 7:56 pm said:
  
  Thank you 🙂
  
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